What did you do in PP?
IMHO, the colors seem to be a little too much pushed.
If you didn't do anything to the colors, forget my comment.
Otherwise it's always a question of taste. For me, a little bit too much.
The rest ist very well.
First, I appreciate the feedback. I'm always looking to improve, especially in post processing. Honestly, it's my least favorite part of photography, probably because I'm not very good at it.
The original was overexposed. Looking at my lightroom settings... Adjustments were -1 to exposure, and my standard settings are applied, which means Camera Standard calibration and +10 to vibrance and +10 to saturation. Now that I've stared at it for a bit, I think the white balance could be a touch warmer. Modified version attached.