What's wrong with the top one is that her eyes are dark. The same exact thing is wrong as would be wrong if this were a Great Blue Heron... The sun seems to be facing you, your shadow is behind you. Arthur Morris says to always point your shadow at the bird... had you done this here, it would have helped, or at least had you had her laying with your shadow at least 45 degrees from her, that is, she would be mostly facing the sun. Also, you are shooting from around her feet... this shot works a lot better when shot from directly overhead, or at least farther up. I like the idea, so try it again!!! This time, I am sure you will get it much better, and you will be more satisfied with the results.