I definitely prefer the first one.
Maybe if you had processed the second like the first I would have liked it more, due to the tighter composition and engaging eyes.
I learnt on a portraiture course that you should try to get the hands in the shot as well if you can, otherwise they may seem 'cut off'. I think that would have helped in this picture
I often ask my subjects to change their pose accordingly.
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