blaydese said:
Please lend some constructive advice, please be gentle, ... :-\
Peace! 8)
Composition wise, it seems a bit forced. It might have been good to leave some breathing room on either side of the image. HDR wise, well... I'm going to try to be nice. The gamma is WAY too high -- this makes the shot look really flat. The colors are not natural (orange skin tones, clouds have some magenta to them) and seem overly saturated, but this may be due to the punched gamma. And there also seems to be ghosting in one of the subjects.
Have you thought about adjusting the photo in ACR or your raw processing software of choice? The sky could use a grad filter, and HDR may not be necessary if you can recover enough detail from one of your shots. If not, try reducing the gamma... you'll notice a big difference.